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Òåìà: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 12.09.2008 12:54 |
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Ðóêîïèñíûå ñòðàíèöû, áóäåò íîâàÿ ãëàâà, Íå ðàçìûòûå ãðàíèöû, ÿñíûé êîíòóð íåðåàëüíîñòè, Ãëàçà â ñåáÿ ñìîòðåâøèå è ãîâîðèâøèå ñåáÿ ñëîâà. Óãîðåòü â õîëîäíîé áàíå, æàðêèì ëåòîì, ñðåäü ñíåãîâ, Íàïèñàòü äâå ñòðî÷êè ìàìå, ïðåáûâàÿ â íåñóñâåòíîñòè, Ëþáîâü ìîÿ ó êðàÿ, íà ëèöå å¸ ìîðùèíû â ñòî ðÿäîâ. Âûòü íà ñîëíûøêî, âèäåòü íåâèäàëü, Çíàòü âñå ïÿòíûøêè íà äóøå ó íåé, È îò òåìíîòû, â ïîëå ïîä ëóíîé ïðÿòàòüñÿ. Ñ áåñïðåðûâíîñòüþ, íåñêîí÷àåìî, Âîñêðåøàòü ñâî¸ îò÷àÿíüå, ß ãîòîâ óæå, ñàìîìó ñåáå ñäàòüñÿ. Íåðàñêðûòûõ ïàðàøþòîâ, ðîâíî ñòîëüêî, ñêîëüêî äíåé, Êîãäà êàæäóþ ñåêóíäó, óìèðàåò ÷ü¸-òî âðåìÿ, Âåñåëååò ïî÷åìó-òî íà äóøå, êîãäà çà äâåðüþ áåç êëþ÷åé. Ýòàæè ìåíÿòü ìåñòàìè, ýòî ñëîæíàÿ èãðà, È ïîïðîáîâàòü íå âðàòü, êîãäà âîêðóã òàêàÿ ñêóêà, À â÷åðà, çàòìåíüå ñîëíöà è îñêîëêè çàòåìí¸ííîãî ñòåêëà. Âûòü íà ñîëíûøêî, âèäåòü íåâèäàëü, Çíàòü âñå ïÿòíûøêè íà äóøå ó íåé, È îò òåìíîòû, â ïîëå ïîä ëóíîé ïðÿòàòüñÿ. Ñ áåñïðåðûâíîñòüþ, íåñêîí÷àåìî, Âîñêðåøàòü ñâî¸ îò÷àÿíüå, ß ãîòîâ óæå ñàìîìó ñåáå ñäàòüñÿ. |
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Òåìà: Re: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 12.09.2008 13:02 |
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Êðàñíîäàð Ãèòàðà, ýëåêòðîãèòàðà.  
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À íè÷å ÷òî ÷åðåç ðàç âñ¸ ðèôìóåòñÿ ? èëè ÿ îòñòàë îò æèçíè ? 
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I know nobody knows
Where it comes and where it goes I know it's everybody's sin You got to lose to know how to win (ñ) ♫Aerosmith♫ |
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Òåìà: Re: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 12.09.2008 13:10 |
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Êðàñíîäàð Ãèòàðà, ýëåêòðîãèòàðà.
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êîìó òî ÿâíî ãðèáî÷êè âðåäÿò, ìàíäðàãîðà ñ íèìè íå ñî÷åòàåòñÿ 
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I know nobody knows
Where it comes and where it goes I know it's everybody's sin You got to lose to know how to win (ñ) ♫Aerosmith♫ |
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Òåìà: Re: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 12.09.2008 18:50 |
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êàêèå åù¸ ãðèáî÷êè,ìîëîäîé ÷åëîâåê? ÿ âàñ íå ïîíèìàþ. | |
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Òåìà: Re: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 12.09.2008 18:56 |
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êëàâèàòóðà (êîìï :) ) 
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>êàêèå åù¸ ãðèáî÷êè,ìîëîäîé ÷åëîâåê? ÿ âàñ íå ïîíèìàþ. ìàíäðàãîðà, ñïðîñè ó gumgurashà, îí ðàññêàæåò 
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Òåìà: Re: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 12.09.2008 19:04 |
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ñèíòåçàòîð “Ñîëîâóøêà” 
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ïîíðàâèëîñü. è ÷îðò ñ íåé, ñ ðèôìîé
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Òåìà: Re: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 12.09.2008 20:05 |
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>è ÷îðò ñ íåé, ñ ðèôìîé Èâàí Ìîðã, íó êàê æå,òàê óæ ïðÿìî ñîâñåì å¸ íåò? ìíå êàçàëîñü, òàê âñ¸ ñêëàäíåíüêî... |
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Òåìà: Re: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 12.09.2008 20:15 |
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ñèíòåçàòîð “Ñîëîâóøêà”
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> Èâàí Ìîðã, íó êàê æå,òàê óæ ïðÿìî ñîâñåì å¸ íåò? ìíå êàçàëîñü, òàê âñ¸ ñêëàäíåíüêî... ðèôìà åñòü. |
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Òåìà: Re: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 12.09.2008 20:20 |
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Ìîñêâà ãèòàðà
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åñòü î÷. õîðîøèå ìåñòà, à ðÿäîì ñîâñåì óæàñíûå. Áîëüøå âñåãî âîçìóùàþò êîíå÷íî íåñóñâåòíîñòü, íåïðåðûâíîñòü è íåðåàëüíîñòü. | |
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Òåìà: Re: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 12.09.2008 20:58 |
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>åñòü î÷. õîðîøèå ìåñòà, à ðÿäîì ñîâñåì óæàñíûå. Áîëüøå âñåãî âîçìóùàþò êîíå÷íî íåñóñâåòíîñòü, íåïðåðûâíîñòü è íåðåàëüíîñòü. ÃëåáÆåãëîâ, ìåíÿ òîæå âîçìóùàåò,íî â ìîìåíò íàïèñàíèÿ,ÿ áûë áëàãîñêëîíåí êî âñåìó,äàæå ê ñâîåé "íåîñâåäîìë¸ííîñòè"â ïëàíå "íåïðåäïî÷òèòåëüíîñòè" òîáîé ýòèõ ñëîâ,ïðèäàþùèõ îòòåíîê "ñîìíèòåëüíîñòè" ìîåìó òàëàíòó â íàïèñàíèè êîíêðåòíî ýòîãî òåêñòà,à òàêæå, âñåé ìîåé òâîð÷åñêîé äåÿòåëüíîñòè â öåëîì.ñîáñíî, ñïàñèáî çà ñîâåðøåííî ñïðàâåäëèâûé îòçûâ ,íî òåáÿ, âîçìóòèò åù¸ áîëüøå,åñëè ÿ ñêàæó,÷òî íå "íåïðåðûâíîñòü,à áåñïðåðûâíîñòü" . õîòÿ ìíå,õóæå óæå íå áóäåò 
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Òåìà: Re: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 12.09.2008 22:10 |
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Êèåâ Crocuta
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Äà,íó.ëñä ïðîãðåññèðóåò | |
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Òåìà: Re: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 12.09.2008 23:19 |
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Òåìà: Re: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 12.09.2008 23:33 |
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Ìîñêâà ãèòàðà
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> ÃëåáÆåãëîâ, ìåíÿ òîæå âîçìóùàåò,íî â ìîìåíò íàïèñàíèÿ,ÿ áûë áëàãîñêëîíåí êî âñåìó,äàæå ê ñâîåé "íåîñâåäîìë¸ííîñòè"â ïëàíå "íåïðåäïî÷òèòåëüíîñòè" òîáîé ýòèõ ñëîâ,ïðèäàþùèõ îòòåíîê "ñîìíèòåëüíîñòè" ìîåìó òàëàíòó â íàïèñàíèè êîíêðåòíî ýòîãî òåêñòà,à òàêæå, âñåé ìîåé òâîð÷åñêîé äåÿòåëüíîñòè â öåëîì.ñîáñíî, ñïàñèáî çà ñîâåðøåííî ñïðàâåäëèâûé îòçûâ ,íî òåáÿ, âîçìóòèò åù¸ áîëüøå,åñëè ÿ ñêàæó,÷òî íå "íåïðåðûâíîñòü,à áåñïðåðûâíîñòü" . õîòÿ ìíå,õóæå óæå íå áóäåò à ìåæäó òåì, èìåííî èç-çà ýòèõ ñëîâ ÿ ðåøèë, ÷òî òû äåâî÷êà. À òû îêàçûâàåòñÿ õëîïåö. |
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Òåìà: Re: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 12.09.2008 23:54 |
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Êðàñíîäàð Ãèòàðà, ýëåêòðîãèòàðà.
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ÃëåáÆåãëîâ, åò âñåãäà òàê))) ìàíäðàãîøà ïðèâûê íàâåðí)))) | |
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I know nobody knows
Where it comes and where it goes I know it's everybody's sin You got to lose to know how to win (ñ) ♫Aerosmith♫ |
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Òåìà: Re: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 13.09.2008 01:42 |
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>à ìåæäó òåì, èìåííî èç-çà ýòèõ ñëîâ ÿ ðåøèë, ÷òî òû äåâî÷êà. À òû îêàçûâàåòñÿ õëîïåö. ÃëåáÆåãëîâ,à ïî÷åìó íå äåâóøêà èëè íå æåíùèíà? ×òî,âñ¸ òàê ïëîõî? è êàê, òû ýòî îïðåäåëÿåøü? Ïèðîêèíåòèê, ñêîðåå îòâûê, èáî íå ÷àñòî, ïîëó÷àåòñÿ,âûêëàäûâàòü ñâîþ æåíñêóþ ëèðèêó òóò.
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Òåìà: Re: ïðèçíàêè æèçíè
Âðåìÿ: 13.09.2008 01:45 |
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Êðàñíîäàð Ãèòàðà, ýëåêòðîãèòàðà.
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ìàíäðàãîðà, ææîøü | |
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I know nobody knows
Where it comes and where it goes I know it's everybody's sin You got to lose to know how to win (ñ) ♫Aerosmith♫ |
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