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Òåìà: Òèòàíèê
Âðåìÿ: 27.10.2007 03:46 
Tchad
À/H2N3

Òèòàíèê. ñ õåpà ëü îí Òèòàíèê.
Êîëü íå ïðîïëûë ñâîèõ 13 ìèëü.
Èóäà-îí,.................... èñêàðèîò-ïðåäàòåëü,
Îá àéñáåðã ñòóêíóâøèñü âäðóã ïðåâðàòèëñÿ â áûëü.

Òèòàí, òî ïîëóáîã, à ýòîò
ëèøü êîðïóñîì ñâîèì òàê âïå÷àòëÿë
×òî äàæå Âîëê ìîðåé áûâàëûé
Ïðåä æàæäîé äèôèðàìá íå óñòîÿë

Äîâåðèë äóøó êîðïóñó ñòàëüíîìó
È ïîíàäåÿâøèñü íà ìîùíîñòè ìàøèí
Îí ïëûë, Ãîëüôñòðèìîì òåïëûì ïîäãîíÿåì
Òóäà, ãäå áóäåò ñáîðèùå ìîãèë

×îò âðîäå íå òî, ìàëîâàòî áóäåò. Êàæèòå êðèòèêó, ìîé ïåðâûé îïûò. Ïîæàëóéñòà.
"How do you sleep at night, with the borrowed dreams from a broken past?"
Àâòîð
Òåìà: Re: Òèòàíèê
Âðåìÿ: 27.10.2007 03:54 
Tchad
À/H2N3

13 òûñÿ÷- åñòåñòâåííî
"How do you sleep at night, with the borrowed dreams from a broken past?"
Àâòîð
Òåìà: Re: Òèòàíèê
Âðåìÿ: 27.10.2007 04:03 
Ñàíêò-Ïåòåðáóðã
Ãèòàðà, íåðâû!!!

ßâíî Äè Êàïðèî íå õâàòàåò, íàäî áû âòèñíóòü êóäà-íèáóäü! Õûí÷ ìåæäó ñòðîê ÷òîëè !
Ëó÷øå ïóçî îò ïèâà, ÷åì ãîðá îò ðàáîòû!

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Àâòîð
Òåìà: Re: Òèòàíèê
Âðåìÿ: 27.10.2007 04:16 
Tchad
À/H2N3

Òî÷íî. çíà÷èò to be continued.
"How do you sleep at night, with the borrowed dreams from a broken past?"
Àâòîð
Òåìà: Re: Òèòàíèê
Âðåìÿ: 27.10.2007 04:30 
Tchad
À/H2N3

Äè Êàïðèî òàì áûë âàëüÿæíî íàãëûé
Îí òî òîãî ïî æèçíè çàáóðåë
×òî òåòêó íà÷àë ëàïàòü ïåðåä ñìåðòüþ
À åñëè áû êîðàáëü ñåë íà ìåëü?

òàê íîðìàëüíî?
"How do you sleep at night, with the borrowed dreams from a broken past?"
Àâòîð
Òåìà: Re: Òèòàíèê
Âðåìÿ: 27.10.2007 14:10 
Ñàíêò-Ïåòåðáóðã
Âîêàë

Òèòàíèê àéñáåðã ïðîòîðàíèò.
Íå âåðèëè. Çåìëÿ êðóãëà.
Íà äíî â ïó÷èíó âñåç óòÿíåò.
À âñåì äîìîé áûëî ïîðà.
Àâòîð
Òåìà: Re: Òèòàíèê
Âðåìÿ: 27.10.2007 16:12 
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