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Òåìà: Alive
Âðåìÿ: 08.03.2007 18:39 |
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Breathing night And silence come again Screaming wind- It's gonna be the same Now you trying to hide under bed You are shiver,slowly going mad Not mad yet? Not mad? YET!!! Silence wakes Shuts all the doors and Time is stopping Sleep has gone When will end This screaming drop in You'll realized It's forever one Shining star Begins laugh on you now Day's so far And soon you will fall down Phantom of the past Is haunting you Run away! Don't think you'll see it through Still alive? Alive? Still alive? Lie!!! |
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Òåìà: Re: Alive
Âðåìÿ: 08.03.2007 19:43 |
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Íåò, îøèáî÷êà âûøåäøè, ýòî íå Àéêà.... íî áëèçêî... Òîâàðèù Ëîñü Àíãåëîâ ïðîñüáà äëÿ íåóìíûõ óçáåêîâ Äæàìèëåé (ó÷ êëàññîâ óçáåêñêîé íà÷àëüíîé øêîëû) ïðèëàãàòü ê òåêñòó ïîäñòðî÷íèê. |
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Òåìà: Re: Alive
Âðåìÿ: 08.03.2007 19:59 |
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íåïëîõî, íî íå ñëîæíî, íåò îðèãèíàëüíîñòè,âñå åòè ñëîâà íåòðóäíî ñîåäèíèòü â òåêñò, íî íóæíî ÷òîòî áîëüøåå èìõî...ãëóáèíà, ÷òîòî ñâîå òèïà All done, stuffed and overfed, contained and cross-examined Robbed of all creativity, each temple is built to cave in What life in the realm of dead things? What life in self-built prisons? Divide and welcome the conqueror, spectate the spectacle –unleashed âîò òàê 
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Òåìà: Re: Alive
Âðåìÿ: 08.03.2007 20:52 |
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Íåïëîõî áû åùå õîòÿ áû ÷åðåç âîðäîâñêèé êîìïèëÿòîð ïðîïóñòèòü... bed - ýòî æå âðîäå èñ÷èñëÿåìîå ñóùåñòâèòåëüíîå, à çíà÷èò ïðè íåé äîëæåí áûòü ëèáî àðòèêëü The - åñëè ðå÷ü èäåò î êîíêðåòíîé êðîâàòè, ëèáî íåîïðåäåëåííûé A - åñëè ïîôèãó ïîä êàêîé ïðÿòàòüñÿ... The doors - òîæå íå áûâàåò, îïðåäåëåííûé/íåîïðåäåëåííûé àðòèêëü íå ñòàâèòñÿ ðÿäîì ñ èñ÷èñëÿåìûìè ñóùåñòâèòåëüíûìè ìíîæåñòâåííîãî ÷èñëà. È äàëåå â òîì æå äóõå... Âðîäå íè÷åãî íå ïóòàþ... 
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