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Òåìà: ÂÎÑÏÎÌÈÍÀÍÈÅ
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Òàãàíðîã 
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ÂÎÑÏÎÌÈÍÀÍÈÅ Íàçàä,  ïîçàáûòûé ñóìðàê êîìíàòû òîé: Ñàä, Âîñïîìèíàíèé ñòàðûõ è ìûñëåé ðîé. Çåëåíûå øòîðû. Ñòàðûé áóäèëüíèê çàäðåáåçæàë. Ñêâîçü ïåðåïëåò îêíà - ëó÷ Íà ïîòåìíåâøèé ïîë ïàë. È ïîñðåäè ïûëèíîê òîëêîòíè ñóåòëèâîé ×üå-òî ëèöî âèæó,  ãëàçàõ - óëûáêà çàñòûëà. Íà ïîòîëêå - çàé÷èê. Ðóêè ñîìêíóëèñü ñ õðóñòîì. Íå óõîäè, ìàìà! õ Ïóñòî. |
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Martin HD-28, Fender American Vintage`52 Telecaster-->Yerasov Goblin10 s/n 001 8-) -->ðîê-í-ðîëë
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Òåìà: Re: ÂÎÑÏÎÌÈÍÀÍÈÅ
Âðåìÿ: 02.05.2005 06:55 |
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ìîè àññîöèàöèè: .......æ¸ëòîå îñâåùåíèå... áîëüíèöà.. êàôåëüíûé ïîë.. ëàìïà ìèãàåò.. æóòêèå òåíè.. øàãè.. ðàçìåðåííûå.. ïî æ¸ëòîìó êàôåëüíîìó ïîëó.. çâóêè âåòðà... ýëåêòðè÷åñêèõ ðàçðÿäîâ... çâóêè íàòÿíóòûõ ïðîâîäîâ.. êàê áóäòî çâîíîê â äâåðü... ðóêè òðÿñóòñÿ... ñêðåæåò.... ìóçûêà ïîä êîæåé... çâóêè ñêðèïêè.. ñòðàõ.. ìåäëåííî... äûõàíèå.. îïÿòü çâîíîê... ðåçêî îáîðà÷èâàåøüñÿ... è íè÷åãî.. è íèêîãî... ñèäèøü è âèäèøü ñåáÿ.. ñî ñòîðîíû.. óæàñ.. óäàð.. áîëü.. õîäèøü âîêðóã ñåáÿ... ëîìèò âñ¸ òåëî.. çâóê áèòîãî ñòåêëà... êàæäûé øîðîõ âñêðûâàåò âåíû... õîëîäíî... ïî òåëó ìóðàøêè... ÷óâñòâóåøü ñâîé ïóëüñ.. è âñå ýòè çâóêè îäèí çà îäíèì... ïîòîì âìåñòå.. îïÿòü îòäåëüíî.. ñâîäÿò òåáÿ ñ óìà... ...êîìà................................... .................................................. ......................... |
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Òåìà: Re: ÂÎÑÏÎÌÈÍÀÍÈÅ
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Êîíöåâêà ñèëüíî öåïàíóëà. Íå õâàòàåò îäíîé áóêâû. Ñëîâî "ïàë" çâó÷èò ëèòåðàòóðíî, íî "óïàë" ÷èòàëîñü áû ëó÷øå. 5 áàëëîâ. Êðàñèâî. |
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Òåìà: Re: ÂÎÑÏÎÌÈÍÀÍÈÅ
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Ìóæèêè, ýòî âû ìîëîäöû. Ìíå áûëî èíòåðåñíî çäåñü äåéñòâèòåëüíî ñèäÿò ëþäè, êîòîðûå ðåàëüíî îöåíèâàþò ñòèõè... Êîíå÷íî ýòî íå ìî¸ ïðîèçâåäåíèå (ê ñîæàëåíèþ). Ýòî Ìèõàèë Âëàäèìèðîâ. "×åòûðå òåòðàäè ñòèõîâ" Áåç îáèä  õîðîøî?
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Òåìà: Re: ÂÎÑÏÎÌÈÍÀÍÈÅ
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êñòàòè ÿ íå ãîâîðèë, ÷òî ýòî íàïèñàë ÿ  äà, êîíöîâêà ææîò. |
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Òåìà: Re: ÂÎÑÏÎÌÈÍÀÍÈÅ
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êñòàòè ÿ íå ãîâîðèë, ÷òî ýòî íàïèñàë ÿ äà, êîíöîâêà ææîò. Çëîé_Áàÿí, òû òîæå ææîø. |
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Òåìà: Re: ÂÎÑÏÎÌÈÍÀÍÈÅ
Âðåìÿ: 02.05.2005 18:13 |
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Îáîäðàííûé êîò? | |
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Òåìà: Re: ÂÎÑÏÎÌÈÍÀÍÈÅ
Âðåìÿ: 03.05.2005 10:17 |
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Íî÷ü, ëóíà, êóñî÷åê ìûëà... Ñîáàêà âûëà, âûëà, âûëà...
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Òåìà: Re: ÂÎÑÏÎÌÈÍÀÍÈÅ
Âðåìÿ: 03.05.2005 16:20 |
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áëÿ...ÿ ùàñ ïáí â ñàìîå íåõî÷ó"!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! óæ èçâèíèòå - òðóäíî ïèñàòü è íàõîäèòü....ÿ ðàçâ¸ëñÿ ñ¸äíÿ..... |
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Òåìà: Re: ÂÎÑÏÎÌÈÍÀÍÈÅ
Âðåìÿ: 03.05.2005 16:40 |
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Çëîé_Áàÿí, òàê ìîæåò ýòî ê ëó÷øåìó... | |
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Òåìà: Re: ÂÎÑÏÎÌÈÍÀÍÈÅ
Âðåìÿ: 03.05.2005 16:52 |
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Íå æåíèñü... Êàæäàÿ ïîñëåäóþùàÿ õóæå ïðåäûäóùåé... | |
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Òåìà: Re: ÂÎÑÏÎÌÈÍÀÍÈÅ
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Íåò óæ, ïóùÿé æåíèòñÿ, ÿ ÷òî îäèí äîëæåí ðàáîòàòü... Ó ìåíÿ ñâàäüáà íà íîñó, íàì¸ê ïîíÿë...
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Òåìà: Re: ÂÎÑÏÎÌÈÍÀÍÈÅ
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Ýõ...òÿæåëî íà ñàìîì äåëå...ñ äðóãîé ñòîðîíû ëåã÷å...äâóëè÷èå äóøè ÷òî-ëè...îõîòà òâîðèòü...íî â ìóçûêàëüíîì ïëàíå...ÿ âåäü íå ïîýò...õîòÿ æàëü - õîòåë áû ÿ îïèñàòü ñåé÷àñ ñåáÿ... 2 ãåîðãèé...ñïàñèáî...ïîíÿë, ÷òî - îïûò ó âàñ åñòü? =))) ýõ...óìîì áàÿíà íå ïîíÿòü....=) Óæàñíî îáèäíî åñëè ÷åñòíî...÷óâñòâóþ ñåáÿ êîçëîì...ëþáîâü çëà - ïîëþáèò è êîç¸ë... à åñëè ïî òåìå...ëþáîâü çëà, óñíóë, è óïîëçëà... |
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Òåìà: Re: ÂÎÑÏÎÌÈÍÀÍÈÅ
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Ëè÷íîãî îïûòà íåò. Íî íà ñâîèõ îøèáêàõ òîëüêî äóðàêè ó÷àòñÿ:))) | |
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