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Òåìà: When you don't have a pain in your soul
Âðåìÿ: 02.06.2010 15:26 
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Ãîëîñ

Âñåì ïðèâåò, ÿ íîâåíüêèé!

Ó÷óñü ïèñàòü - ïèøó ñâîþ ïåðâóþ ïåñíþ. Ïîêðèòèêóéòå, ïîæàëóéñòà!

When you don't have a pain in your soul,
You can see stars are so bright.
It seems she has no chance to go -
She will be your's this perfect night.

Suddenly she turns you away,
She has gone, and there's no back way.
It's so heavy. Heavy, heavy so!
Wish you don't have a pain in your soul.
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Òåìà: Re: When you don't have a pain in your soul
Âðåìÿ: 02.06.2010 15:39 
cringecore
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>ÿ íîâåíüêèé!
÷îòà, çäà¸ööî ìíó, âð¸øø òû :da:

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áèòëàìå ïîïàõèâàåä
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Òåìà: Re: When you don't have a pain in your soul
Âðåìÿ: 02.06.2010 15:53 
ïëàòôîðìà Ïëàíåðíàÿ


>>ÿ íîâåíüêèé!
>÷îòà, çäà¸ööî ìíó, âð¸øø òû
äàäà äâå áåëûå çâåçäû, à ïîä íîâåíüêîãî êîñèò...
êåì òû áûë â ïðîøëîé æèçíè? è çà ÷òî òåáÿ îáèäåëè, ÷òî òû ïîìåíÿë íèê?
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íó è äëÿ ïîðÿäêà:
Åñëè ó âàñ íåò áîëè â äóøå,
Âû ìîæåòå óâèäåòü çâåçäû òàê ÿðêî.
Êàæåòñÿ, îíà íå èìååò íèêàêèõ øàíñîâ ïîéòè -
Îíà áóäåò âàøà â ýòîò ïðåêðàñíûé âå÷åð.

Âäðóã îíà ïîâîðà÷èâàåòñÿ òåáÿ,
Îíà óøëà, è íåò ïóòè íàçàä.
Ýòî î÷åíü òÿæåëî. Òÿæåëûå, òÿæåëûå òàê!
Æåëàþ âàì íå áîëåòü â âàøåé äóøå.
http://www.stihi.ru/avtor/gumgurush Ýòà áîëü, ýòîò êàéô, äàæå ýòî ãoâío – èìåíóåòñÿ ñ ãîðäîñòüþ – «æèçíü»(c)
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Òåìà: Re: When you don't have a pain in your soul
Âðåìÿ: 02.06.2010 16:13 
Ìîñêâà
Ãîëîñ

Íîâåíüêèé â ïëàíå òåêñòîâ
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Òåìà: Re: When you don't have a pain in your soul
Âðåìÿ: 02.06.2010 16:37 
cringecore
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ýò ïàíÿòíî. ïî÷åìó íå èäèø èëè ñàíñêðèò? ïî÷åìó ôàêåí èíãëèø, äà åñ÷î òàã áîíàëüíî?
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Òåìà: Re: When you don't have a pain in your soul
Âðåìÿ: 02.06.2010 17:01 



Elektrik , ôèãàñå íîâåíüêèé... :lol:
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Òåìà: Re: When you don't have a pain in your soul
Âðåìÿ: 02.06.2010 17:16 
Ìîñêâà
Ãîëîñ

×òî ñêàæåòå ïî òåêñòó? Àíãëèéñêèé ïîòîìó, ÷òî åùå äî ìåëîäèè â ãîëîâó ïðèøëà âîò ýòà ôðàçà, ÿ åå îùóòèë.
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Òåìà: Re: When you don't have a pain in your soul
Âðåìÿ: 02.06.2010 19:24 



Ãóì, íå èíà÷å êàê "ïðîìòîì" ïåðåâåë? :lol:
Î÷åíü çäîðîâî, âñ¸-òàêè, æèòü! (ñ)
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Òåìà: Re: When you don't have a pain in your soul
Âðåìÿ: 02.06.2010 20:19 
Ìîñêâà
Ãîëîñ

Ïåðåâåäó à-ëÿ ïðîìïò ñõîäó

Êîãäà ñåðäöå áîëü òåáå íå ðâåò,
 íåáå çâåçäû ñâåòÿò î÷åíü ÿðêî,
È îíà, ïîõîæå, íå óéäåò -
Ñ íåé ñåãîäíÿ íî÷üþ áóäåò æàðêî.

Íàâñåãäà îíà óõîäèò âäðóã,
Âñå, óøëà, òåïåðü âñåãî ëèøü "äðóã".
È ñòðàäàíüåì ïîëíèòñÿ äóøà -
Ïåéòå ïèâî íå ñïåøà!
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Òåìà: Re: When you don't have a pain in your soul
Âðåìÿ: 02.06.2010 20:19 



>heavy so!

>Ãóì, íå èíà÷å êàê "ïðîìòîì" ïåðåâåë?
ýòî íîâûé ìåì!
â îäèí ïðåêðàñíûé äåíü ìíîæåñòâî ïîëüçîâàòåëåé âçÿëî è ðàçáàíèëîñü
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Òåìà: Re: When you don't have a pain in your soul
Âðåìÿ: 02.06.2010 20:23 



>Ïåéòå ïèâî íå ñïåøà!

Ýëèê, âîò ýòà ñòðî÷êà èç ðèòìà âûáèâàåòñÿ, à òàê òðóÚ!
Î÷åíü çäîðîâî, âñ¸-òàêè, æèòü! (ñ)
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Òåìà: Re: When you don't have a pain in your soul
Âðåìÿ: 02.06.2010 23:02 
Ìîñêâà
Ãîëîñ

Ìóçûêà ê òåêñòó
http://webfile.ru/4527481#
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Òåìà: Re: When you don't have a pain in your soul
Âðåìÿ: 02.06.2010 23:51 
Ìîñêâà
Ñèëà ìûñëè

Êàêîé-òî íåìíîãî ñòðàííûé òåêñò.
"She will be your's this perfect night." Òóò èìåííî "your's" èëè âñå-òàêè "yours"?
È ìíå êàæåòñÿ, ÷òî pain äîëæíî áûòü ñ "the"...
My prophet is a fool with his one, one, one; are not they the Ox, and none by the Book? ("The Book of the Law", A.Crowley)
 ýòîò ôîðóì ìîãóò ïèñàòü òîëüêî çàðåãèñòðèðîâàííûå ïîëüçîâàòåëè!