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Òåìà: My Own End
Âðåìÿ: 08.02.2017 21:16 
Ñàíêò Ïèòåðáóðã


So scary feel my own end,
You're never said about it.
I'll cant stay on this land,
What was heat ever lighted.

Like a bird, that fallen from the sky,
I'll die alone on the earth,
In the night will killed by my cry.
Tell me, what will be left?

Leave me, my friends,
Come here dear silence,
I'm just pain of the plants,
Those, what was killed by the violence.

Can you speak about dead?
Can you hear song of the night?
If the skies will be painted to red,
Will you stay? Will you fight?
.......................................

Òàê ñòðàøíî ÷óâñòâîâàòü ñâîé ñîáñòâåííûé êîíåö,
Òû íèêîãäà íå ãîâîðèëà îá ýòîì.
ß íå ñìîãó îñòàòüñÿ íà ýòîé çåìëå,
×òî âñåãäà áûëà îñâåùåííà òåïëîì.

Ñëîâíî ïòèöà, ÷òî óïàëà ñ íåáà,
ß â îäèíî÷åñòâå óìðó íà çåìëå,
 íî÷è áóäåò óáèò ìîé êðèê.
Ñêàæè ìíå, ÷òî æå îñòàíåòñÿ?

Îñòàâüòå ìåíÿ, äðóçüÿ ìîè,
ïîäîéäè, äîðîãàÿ òèøèíà,
ß ïðîñòî áîëü ðàñòåíèé
Óáèòûõ â ðåçóëüòàòå íàñèëèÿ.

Ìîæåøü ëè òû ãîâîðèòü î ì¸ðòâûõ?
Ìîæåøü ëè òû óñëûøàòü ïåñíþ íî÷è?
Åñëè íåáåñà îêðàñÿòñÿ â êðàñíûé,
Òû îñòàíåøüñÿ? Òû áóäåøü áîðîòüñÿ?
Ôèë
Àâòîð
Òåìà: Re: My Own End
Âðåìÿ: 09.02.2017 00:32 
Ëåíèíãðàä
àê. ãèò.

>Òàê ñòðàøíî ÷óâñòâîâàòü ñâîé ñîáñòâåííûé êîíåö,
Ïî-ðóññêè ýòî çâó÷èò âåñåëî. Íå âåñåëî "÷óâñòâîâàòü êîí÷èíó".

>×òî âñåãäà áûëà îñâåùåííà òåïëîì.
Ýòî íîâîå ñëîâî â ôèçèêå.

>ß ïðîñòî áîëü ðàñòåíèé
>Óáèòûõ â ðåçóëüòàòå íàñèëèÿ.
 ìîìåíò èõ ïîåäàíèÿ òðàâîÿäíûìè.

>Åñëè íåáåñà îêðàñÿòñÿ â êðàñíûé,
>Òû îñòàíåøüñÿ? Òû áóäåøü áîðîòüñÿ?
Ñ àâòîðîì â íî÷è?

Íî âñå ýòî ïóñòÿêè. Âîïðîñ îäèí: êóäà âñå ýòî äåòü?
Îí ñëîâî ïðîâåðèë íà ïðî÷íîñòü è âåñ...(ñ)
Àâòîð
Òåìà: Re: My Own End
Âðåìÿ: 11.02.2017 04:09 
Ëåíèíãðàä
àê. ãèò.

Godunov ,
Âîò ìîÿ ïîïûòêà ñäåëàòü òâîé àãëèöêèé ñòèõ ðóññêèì.

×òî äåíü ãðÿäóùèé ìíå ãîòîâèò?
×òî íî÷ü âî òüìå ñâîåé òàèò?
À ñåðäöå þíîå áîëèò
È æäåò îòâåòà â êàæäîì ñëîâå,
Ðîæäåííîì â íåäðàõú èíòåðíåòà,
 íåòðåçâîé ãîëîâå ïîýòà,
 ãëàçàõ âåäóùåãî òîêøîó,
Æäåò ñëîâà äîáðîãî, áîëüøîãî....
Îí ñëîâî ïðîâåðèë íà ïðî÷íîñòü è âåñ...(ñ)
Àâòîð
Òåìà: Re: My Own End
Âðåìÿ: 11.02.2017 16:31 
Ñàíêò Ïèòåðáóðã


>Godunov ,
>Âîò ìîÿ ïîïûòêà ñäåëàòü òâîé àãëèöêèé ñòèõ ðóññêèì.
>×òî äåíü ãðÿäóùèé ìíå ãîòîâèò?
>×òî íî÷ü âî òüìå ñâîåé òàèò?
>À ñåðäöå þíîå áîëèò
>È æäåò îòâåòà â êàæäîì ñëîâå,
>Ðîæäåííîì â íåäðàõú èíòåðíåòà,
>Â íåòðåçâîé ãîëîâå ïîýòà,
>Â ãëàçàõ âåäóùåãî òîêøîó,
>Æäåò ñëîâà äîáðîãî, áîëüøîãî....
Íó, ãëàâíóþ òåìó íåêîòîðûõ ìîèõ ñòèõîâ òû óëîâèë: íàäåæäà íà ëó÷øåå, ïîñðåäè ïðîèñõîäÿùåãî äåðüìà.
Íî èìåííî àãëèöêèé ñòèõ òû íå ñäåëàë ðóññêèì, â àãëèöêîì ÿ ïûòàþñü áîëüøå êàêèì-òî áîëåå äåïðåññèâíûì êðàñêàì âíèìàíèå óäåëÿòü, à âîò íà ÷òî-íèáóäü èç ìîèõ ìîèõ ðóññêîÿçû÷íûõ òåêñòîâ ïîäõîäèò)))
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